Leon, who is the eldest child in his family, going with Maria, who will be his wife soon, to Maria's house to visit her parents. Leon grown up from the province since he was born and Maria grown up from Manila, capital city of the Philippines. They met in Leon’s province when Maria visited there to escape from complicated city and rest. Leon liked Maria when he saw her at first. Maria liked Leon’s purity that lived in a province without any corrupted by society day by day. Days that Maria stayed were enough to let them to love.
Leon wore neat and tidy suit, with smell of strong perfume. His suit didn’t look better than people who wear like a model from the city, but he tried himself to wear neatly. Leon stepped in to the bus going to Manila. Maria followed him and led Leon where to sit in the bus. They both sat on the seat; people were getting in the bus. The bus was full; Leon and Maria paid the fare while the bus started to move.
“How do I look?” Leon asked to Maria. Maria smiled, and said, “Great.” Leon then let out a deep sigh. Leon was nervous to see Maria’s parents. They are planning get married before Valentine’s Day. At least, Leon should gain Maria’s parents’ favor even with his appearance.
-ringing- Maria’s phone was ringing. It was her mom. Perhaps Maria’s mom wanted to know where they were. “Hello?” Maria answered. Leon couldn’t hear what Maria’s mom was saying on the phone, but he felt and knew what Maria and her mom were talking about. “Ok, mom.” Maria ended the call. Leon didn’t ask anything and leaned on the bus seat to rest.
The bus stopped. Leon and Maria got out from the bus and looking for other rides to take them to Maria’s house.
The weather was so fine to visit someone. However, the sound of cars, jeepneys, and tricycles and the smoke were mixed up in the air. Leon and Maria breathe in the murky smoke. They got in the jeepney. The sound of cramped jeepney was so loud. Leon and Maria were waiting for the time to get near to Maria’s house.
On their way to go to Maria’s house, holding each other’s hands. “Are we near?” Leon asked. “Almost. Are you okay?” Maria asked back. Leon nodded his head twice without saying anything. Maria seemed excited. She was keep on smiling and humming while walking. “Did you tell your parents about me?” Leon asked with curiousness. “Yes.” Leon thought that her parents might hate him. “Don’t worry.” Maria said to Leon like she knows what’s in Leon’s mind.
Maria pointed her finger to one of the wide houses. It was a white splendid house with blue roof on the top. Leon thought that he was middle of the several castles. When he was very near to the house, he rechecked his suit and face with the mirror of Maria. –ding dong- Maria pressed the door bell. The door opened by the helper in the house, Leon stepped his feet in the house carefully. Maria led Leon where to sit before they meet Maria’s parents. Maria went to 2nd floor to call her parents. Leon sat on the sofa, and staring strange stuffs in the house. Then he found Maria’s baby picture on the table near to sofa. Maria was cute and cubby. She posed holding tree with reddish chick and lips. Smile appeared to Leon’s face.
Leon heard something that sounds like a foot step from the 2nd floor. Leon stood up straight from the long sofa, Maria and her parents were walking down to Leon. Leon greeted Maria’s parents and they greeted back to Leon and said, “You must had hard time to come here. Welcome.”
This alternate ending is written well--I can almost feel the tension in the air myself :) impressive and imaginative. Keep it up!
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